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veronika
04-24-2008, 12:01 PM
I need your help especially with articles, commas and prepositions. Please, check and correct (if necessary) the following sentences.
Thanks

The concept of memoria could contain also commemoration of deeds such as foundation, commitment of members of specific social groups, such as guilds or fraternities, or statement of succession and political claims.

Within the field of cultural history the mental construction of families in the middle ages has been already studied, however this was done through the participation of family members in the feud cases or through the regulations of the law of inheritance.

The research will give insight into the process of the mental construction of the family and its durability. In this research families from different cities are studied in detail, so through the wide scope of this research we will understand how the families dealt with life here and hereafter and how they used the commemoration of the dead to express their identity.

In these case studies, the explanation of expression of a specific family through the commemoration of the dead will be investigated.

himur_power
04-27-2008, 09:42 PM
I need your help especially with articles, commas and prepositions. Please, check and correct (if necessary) the following sentences.
Thanks

The concept of memoria could contain also commemoration of deeds such as foundation, commitment of members of specific social groups, such as guilds or fraternities, or statement of succession and political claims.

I don't have a problem with the entire composition except for this one. I think it's redundant and too much for you to cite an example for an example you just gave. I'd rather you talk about them in two different sentences. The sentence you made already is a bit long as it is