hi! to everyone of this forum. Any correction? of the following sentences

[sana]

I am passoniate about writing and travelling. I would like to travel all beautiful places of the world. And I wish to know the unknown places. Even I would like to experience the adventerious journey. Finally, when I come back to my abode I will start writing those experiences.

[Rusty]

I am passoniate about writing and travelling. I would like to travel all beautiful places of the world. And I wish to know the unknown places. Even I would like to experience the adventerious journey. Finally, when I come back to my abode I will start writing those experiences.

I am passoniate about writing and travelling. I would like to travel to all the beautiful places of in the world. And I wish to know would like to discover the unknown places. Even I would even like to experience the adventurous journey(Suggestion: ...the adventures of the journey). Finally, When I finally come back to my abode I will start writing those experiences.