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[Anonymous]

Hi everybody,

Would you correct my sentences?

1) She would keep aside her assignments until last a minute, or she would make mistakes if she completed her assignments in too much of a hurry. Therefore, She would rather fail in a course or get low grades.
2)I also suggested her if she stuck with her study, she would be succeed.
3)Finally, I told her my suggestions that She could take a five credits English class, and a three credits mathematic class in fall 2004 by distance.
4)If she completed preparation classes, she could enroll in the pharmacy technician course, and she could attend college on weekends.
5)Her husband would be at home on weekend/s.He would look after her baby.
6)At least She would get satisfaction that she was not wasting her valuable time, and simultaneously she was taking care of her by her own.
7)Lorry was really wondering about continuing her education; she was embarrassed in taking decision whether distance learning is better for her or a classroom learning.
8)I advised her that she could take the advantage of distance learning, and that seemed fine for me in her present situation.
9)I also suggested her if she kept herself self-motivated and self-disciplined, she could complete {her} classes successfully.
10) I pointed out that that would be a lengthy procedure, but there was no way she had no choice.


Thank you

[Rusty]

1) She would put aside her assignments until the last minute, or she would make mistakes if she completed her assignments in too much of a hurry. Therefore,
she would rather fail in a course or get low grades (.. Rather is followed by than. Either and or go together.
Suggestions: She would rather fail than get low grades.
She would either fail or get low grades).
2)I also suggested to her that if she stuck with her study, she would <strike>be</strike> succeed.
3)Finally, I told her my suggestions: that she could take a five credits English class, and a three credits mathematic class in fall 2004 by distance/by distance learning/by correspondence).
4)If she completed preparation classes, she could enroll in the pharmacy technician course, and she could attend college on weekends. (OK).
5)Her husband would be at home on weekends. He would look after her baby. (OK).
6)At least, she would get the satisfaction of knowing that she was not wasting her valuable time, and simultaneously that she was taking care of herself on her own.
7)Lorry was really wondering about continuing her education; she was embarrassed in taking decision whether distance learning is better for her or a classroom learning. (Suggestion: She was embarrassed by having to make the decision whether distance learning or classroom learning would be better for her).
I advised her that she could take the advantage of distance learning, and that seemed fine for me in her present situation. (Suggestion: ...and that seemed to me to be the best for her present situation).
9)I also suggested to her that if she kept herself self-motivated and self-disciplined, she could complete {her} classes successfully.
10) I pointed out that that would be a lengthy procedure, but there was no way she had no choice. (Suggestion:....but there was no other way; she had no choice).