Check these, please!

[Anonymous]

Hi,
Please check these sentences and correct them.
1. What was that? / What was what? / I mean how the show was. / Uh! It was fine.
2. What was that? / What was what? / You can't act angry. That's not how the play goes. Act grumpy, not angry!
3. Here's the procedure, so it won't happen again. Don't stick a pen in. I'll give you a simple one-two-three procedure.
4. How much longer will you put up with this (for)?
5. You know what the sickest thing is about you? It's that you don't have any fantasies of your own.
6. Well, how long have we been married? / Um... 43 years. / Is that true? Has it been that long? Anyway, for/during our marriage, how many times have we made/taken trips?
7. The paintings seemed to have made a lasting impression on you!
8. We often zero out our bank account to make ends meet.
Thanks a million.
Ann

[Rusty]

1. What was that? / What was what? / I mean how the show was. / Uh! It was fine. (OK).
2. What was that? / What was what? / You can't act angry. That's not how the play goes. Act grumpy, not angry! (OK).
3. Here's the procedure, so it won't happen again. Don't stick a pen in. I'll give you a simple one-two-three procedure. (OK, but I'm not sure about "pen." Did you mean "pin"?).
4. How much longer will you put up with this (<strike>for</strike>)?
(Or, 4a. For how much longer will you put up with this?).
5. You know what the sickest thing is about you? It's that you don't have any fantasies of your own. (OK).
6. Well, how long have we been married? / Um... 43 years. / Is that true? Has it been that long? Anyway, <strike>for/</strike> during our marriage, how many times have we made/taken trips?
7. The paintings seemed to have made a lasting impression on you! (OK).
8. We often zero out our bank account to make ends meet. (OK).