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Alexander
08-14-2004, 03:34 PM
Could you please check on this part of a summary...
changes, corrections, versions and explanations are really welcome!

We must include that manycompanies put a lot of efforts to keep the high team spirit. As example, these companies provide to the employees´ welfare by starting the work day with group exercises and offering them company-paid trips.In addition the employees have the opportunity to discuss important issues related to the improvement of working conditions.

Rusty
08-14-2004, 04:12 PM
We must include ("we must add/we must conclude" are common expressions. "We must include" sounds unnatural, though it may be all right in the context of a list) that many companies put a lot of effort <strike>s</strike> into keeping the <strike>high</strike> team spirit high. As an example, these companies provide for/contribute to/ the employees´ welfare by starting the work day with group exercises and offering them company-paid trips. In addition, the employees have the opportunity to discuss important issues related to the improvement of working conditions.