sentence structure, thesis statement

[AndreaL]

Please help me. I was given an assignment to write an essay. I have to write a these topic for this essay. Can you please read this and make any correction. Thank you


I choose to read books instead of watching television. I like to read books, because they are educational, and you can choose from a variety of topics. You can learn correct sentence structure, perfect pronunciation of words and grammar.

Although, you can say almost the same for television. A television is considered a bood tube, because you sit there with the remote and get lost in the blut nowhere.

In my essay you will get to know my ffavorite authors, and why I like their writing style. So sit back relax, and let me entertain you.

[Pete]

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>Please help me. I was given an assignment to write an essay. I have to write a these topic for this essay. Can you please read this and make any correction. Thank you


I choose to read books instead of watching television. I like to read books, because they are educational, and you can choose from a variety of topics. You can learn correct sentence structure, perfect pronunciation of words and grammar. [Actually, I don't see how reading helps you with pronunciation, especially if the language is English. That's one place where television has the advantage.]

<strike>Although</strike> However, you can say almost the same for television. A television is considered a <strike>bood</strike> boob tube [This term is slang; if you are going to use it in a serious essay, you would usually put quotes around it.], because you sit there with the remote and get lost in the <u>blut</u> nowhere. [I'm not familiar with this word; what did you have in mind?]

In my essay you will get to know my <strike>ffavorite</strike> favorite authors and why I like their writing style. [I removed a comma.] So sit back relax, and let me entertain you.

-- Generally, you introduce the topic of an essay in a single paragraph. You could easily put all these sentences together in one paragraph.