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dear reader pete and Rusty or anyone can you help me to check and correct this composition

the question is

Try and imagine your slef in solitary confinment , write a short essay in wich you describe what would miss most, what books you think you would read, what possessions you would like to have with you .etc(120-140 WORDS)

and I wrote :
"It's my first day in the solitary confinment ..I'm full of hope , I feel that I can over come everthing ..my self confidence is getting higher.
I can't bear,I can't star here anymore ..that was myposition after one week,oh my God

I need to talk,I need someone , no no I need my mom , no I need my friend..Ii really need a shoulder to cry on ,I'm getting deprssed

It's very hard to stay in solitary confinment, I tried to imagine that,
I found it imposible.

I felt lonely and I was in a very bad mode

I think that imprisonment for life is an immoral punishment and very bad thing.

so when we decide to punish somewho , we have to think twice and seriously."




so can you check it for me ..



Rgards

[Pete]

>the question is
>
>Try and imagine <strike>your slef</strike> yourself in solitary confinment , write a short essay in wich you describe what would miss most, what books you think you would read, what possessions you would like to have with you .etc(120-140 WORDS)

>and I wrote :

-- My specific corrections are interspersed below, followed by a comment.

"It's my first day in the solitary confinement. I'm full of hope, I feel that I can <strike>over come</strike> overcome everything. My self confidence is getting higher.
I can't bear, I can't <strike>star</strike> stay here anymore.That was my position after one week, oh my God.

I need to talk,I need someone; no no I need my mom; no I need my friend. I really need a shoulder to cry on. I'm getting depressed

It's very hard to stay in solitary confinement; I tried to imagine that; I found it impossible.

I felt lonely and I was in a very bad <strike>mode</strike> mood.[Is "mood" what you meant? I don't think "mode" fits.]

I think that imprisonment for life is an immoral punishment and very bad thing, so when we decide to punish <strike>somewho</strike> someone, we have to think twice and seriously."


-- You did a very good job of imagining the effects of solitary confinement on someone and describing how that person might feel. However, I think the teacher's intent was for you to use the solitary confinement idea as a hypothetical idea in order to think about the things you would miss (you did mention human contact and specific individuals that you would miss), and the specific things that would help you endure being alone if you could bring them with you. I think you missed that point in the exercise. Maybe you would do better if you tried to imagine yourself stranded on an isolated island that had food and shelter in abundance, but nothing of your previous life except what you thought to pack and bring.

ALSO: be careful of punctuation and spacing. There is no standard punctuation of the form: space period period, but you tried to use that many times. Also be careful to begin sentences with capital letters and not to separate independent clauses with just a comma.

[i'm not in love]

thank you a lot

regards