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ren
06-06-2005, 12:10 PM
please check this and please suggest better ones..


1.About my future plans,unless I am convinved that you will accept me as your wife,I am not interested in coming back.

2.I looked after sam as my own son.He was well behaved when you brought him last December. Later he changed a lot.

3.Once he said he purposely tear the tip of my dress by using those firecrackers on Vishu day.( I am posting this sentence again, as I have a doubt whether I should use tear or teared or ??)

4.Also I will never forget the words your mother had spoken to me. I know very well what she meant.If you don't trust me, then it's up to you.

5.Your father always think that I am wasting his son's hard earned money.( any other way to say this).Did I ever ask you to buy food from outside?Did I ever ask you to take me to any restaurant?Did I ever ask you anything for me ?But your father thinks that I am a spendthrift.

6.Your parents says that I have to give you some more time to accept me as your wife.After the marriage, it's not fair to say that you will accept me wholeheartedly as a wife only after one month,or after 6 months, or after one year or so. ITS CHEATING.I too have painful memories.Will you accept if do the same to you??

7.I don't wanna live as your so-called wife.If you can accept me as your wife, then we will live together.When I came back in December after completing my studies, I had some reasonable expectations from you.But you were cheating me for about 5 months.I am not planning to come back for the next 6 months or so since I have joined here in an IT company.I have told my decision.Let me know your decison after discussing with your parents.

Thanks very much in advance

Pete
06-07-2005, 11:14 AM
1.About my future plans,unless I am <strike>convinved</strike> convinced that you will accept me as your wife,I am not interested in coming back. [OK.]

2.I looked after <strike>sam</strike> Sam as my own son.He was well behaved when you brought him last December. Later he changed a lot. [OK, except proper names must be capitalized.]

3.Once he said he purposely <strike>tear</strike> tore the tip of my dress by using those firecrackers on Vishu day.( I am posting this sentence again, as I have a doubt whether I should use tear or teared or ??) [The past of "tear" is "tore". However, "damaged" probably fits better what a firecracker does. "Tear" means to rip with force.]

4.Also I will never forget the words your mother <strike>had spoken</strike> spoke to me. I know very well what she meant.If you don't trust me, then it's up to you.

5.Your father always <strike>think</strike> thinks that I am wasting his son's hard earned money.( any other way to say this) [I'd say this is fine.]. Did I ever ask you to buy food from outside?Did I ever ask you to take me to any restaurant?Did I ever ask you anything for me ?But your father thinks that I am a spendthrift.

6.Your parents <strike>says</strike> say that I have to give you some more time to accept me as your wife.After the marriage, it's not fair to say that you will accept me wholeheartedly as a wife only after one month,or after 6 months, or after one year or so. ITS CHEATING.I too have painful memories.Will you accept if do the same to you??

7.I don't <strike>wanna</strike> want to live as your so-called wife.If you can accept me as your wife, then we will live together.When I came back in December after completing my studies, I had some reasonable expectations from you.But you were cheating me for about 5 months. [This is quite vague. I neither know what "cheating" took place, nor which 5-month period is indicated.] I am not planning to come back for the next 6 months or so since I have joined here in an IT company.I have told you my decision.Let me know your <strike>decison</strike> decision after discussing with your parents.

-- You still need to learn to leave a space after a comma or a period.