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[Alexander]

Are you considering in being a father or a mother? It seems like a simple question, however this fact concerns much more about just answering it. A choice like that can change your life drastically, not to mention the fact that is not easy to start a family and to be responsible for another life in these days in which is truly difficult to settle professionally and financially. As an example, having a child may interfere in your professional life because you might choose between your career and your child moreover we must point out the fact that is quite expensive to take care of a baby.
Apparently the financial issue is something that matters indeed, especially in our society in which we long for buying many things, mainly for a child of ours.
Another important question is what is the appropriate age to have kids? Is twenty too soon or thirty too late? Considering that in our twenties, we take our time to go to college and to start our professional lives, perhaps we should wait until we could guarantee to our child a pleasant future.
Despite all of these challenging aspects, nothing is compared to the joy of having a baby. I believe the unique great feeling of being a parent surpass all odds that could come in the way, we know that is just not a simple task, as a matter of fact it is quite arduous, however it is really worthy it, isn’t it?
So, if you prepared to this, welcome to a lifetime experience in which you are going to face an emotional roller coaster, in other words, congratulations you are going to be a parent!!!

[Pete]

Following are some changes:Are you considering in being a father or a mother? It seems like a simple question, however this fact issue concerns involves much more about just answering it. A choice like that can change your life drastically, not to mention the fact that is not easy to start a family and to be responsible for another life in these days in which it is truly difficult to settle become established professionally and financially. As an example, having a child may interfere in your professional life because you might have to choose between your career and your child; moreover we must point out the fact that is quite expensive to take care of a baby.
Apparently the financial issue is something that matters indeed, especially in our society in which we long for buying many things, mainly especially for a child of ours.
Another important question is what is the appropriate age to have kids? Is twenty too soon or thirty too late? Considering that in our twenties, we take our time to go to college and to start our professional lives, perhaps we should wait until we could guarantee to our child a pleasant future.
Despite all of these challenging aspects, nothing is compared can compare to the joy of having a baby. I believe the unique great feeling of being a parent surpasses all odds disadvantages that could come in the way. We know that is just not a simple task; as a matter of fact it is quite arduous. However it is really worthy it, isn’t it?
So, if you prepared to this, welcome to a lifetime experience in which you are going to face an emotional roller coaster. In other words, congratulations you are going to be a parent!




-- I made a number of minor changes. You have a tendency to try to connect independent clauses with only a comma; you should use a semicolon if they really belong in one sentence, or else split them into different sentences.

More generally, this essay has many very short paragraphs where you give the topic and then add maybe one comment, but the subject is not developed well. It is best to have a number of sentences in a paragraph, developing the main topic with things like examples, proof, or additional information.

Finally, I saw little to nothing in the preceding text to justify your main conclusion that raising a child would create an "emotional roller coaster". You might do a good essay leading up to that conclusion (including lots of examples of both "emotional ups" and "emotional downs"), or else you should try for a conclusion that follows the points you did make.

(You might look at Dmitrij's recent postings on writing essays and paragraphs, which he put in this forum.)