please proofread the sentences for the drama “ Death of a salesman.”

[patp]

Hi everybody,
I am writing the reader’s reaction about the drama. please proofread my sentences.
1] After going through this drama, I felt like he was an unplanned person.
2] It seemed like he didn’t have any plans for his bright future.
3] He was just passing days and living from hand to mouth.
4] He was a salesman almost thirty-six years.
5] After working this many years, he should be on the senior position, but he wasn’t.
6] Furthermore, he was working on the commission basis.
7] Initially he might be making good money, but after some years he wasn’t getting that much customers.
8] During that period, he should think about other options rather than sticking with the same job.
9] First, he was an experienced person; he could go for the more stable and high paying job. Otherwise, he should try to improve his business skills.
10] He should change his business tactics and adapt new market trends.
11] Besides, he failed to shows his capacities to his employer and his necessities for the company’s profit.
12] As a result, he spent thirty-six years of his life as a salesman.
13] In addition, his friend was offering him a job, but he denied his offer because he thought that was insulting and humiliating for him. That was totally unacceptable.
14] I believe everybody is deserved for the better life, and he wasn’t option for that; however he wasn’t seemed careful while making his choices.
15]Therefore, he was facing so many financial problems and living a miserable life.

Thanks and regards.
patp

[Pete]

>I am writing the reader’s reaction about the drama. please proofread my sentences.
1] After going through this drama, I felt like he was an unplanned person. [The phrase "unplanned person" doesn't seem to make sense.]
2] It seemed like he didn’t have any plans for his bright future. [This seems to say what you probably intended in sentence 1. You could omit that part of sentence 1. The phrase "his bright future" doesn't seem right, since he has no bright future. Maybe, "a bright future".
3] He was just passing days and living from hand to mouth.
4] He was a salesman almost thirty-six years.
5] After working this many years, he should be on the senior position, but he wasn’t.
6] Furthermore, he was working on the a commission basis.
7] Initially he might be making good money, but after some years he wasn’t getting that much many customers.
[In fact, when he was younger, he had been a highly successful salesman.]
8] During that period, he should think about other options rather than sticking with the same job.
9] First, he was an experienced person; he could go for the more stable and high paying job. Otherwise, he should try to improve his business skills.
10] He should change his business tactics and adapt new market trends.
11] Besides, he failed to shows his capacities to his employer and his necessities for the company’s profit.
12] As a result, he spent thirty-six years of his life as a salesman.
13] In addition, his friend was offering him a job, but he denied refused his offer because he thought that was insulting and humiliating for him. That was totally unacceptable.
14] I believe everybody is deserved for the deserves a better life, and he wasn’t but he didn't have an option for that; however he wasn’t seemed hadn't been careful while making his choices.
15]Therefore, he was facing so many financial problems and living a miserable life.

-- Can you compare this play to any classic tragedies?