Native speakers help with paragraphs please!

[daya]

Hello native speakers,

The below paragraphs will be posted on the corporate web site of the company, dealing with the software development. The software is meant for vertical markets, such as property listings publishing. I would appreciate if someone could have a look at it and correct me. I am interested not only in grammar, but also in the style, if possible.

Thank you in advance.
Daya

1) Showcase
What helps online business reach its objectives and enjoy smooth cash flow? CompanyX asserts that it is a powerful software engine and professional support, like those CompanyX provides. Click on the above image to explore the functionality of the software developed by CompanyX team.

2) 10 reasons to use CompanyX product
We are sure that you will discover much more advantages when you use CompanyX product in your business.
We would like to quote top 10 reasons to use CompanyX. They are most often mentioned by our customers.
1. My property owners find it very easy to publish/edit their property listings.
2. The most viewable pages of my site are house pictures and movies.
3. I like that all my info is kept in one place and I have full control of inquiries.
4. Availability Calendar saves the time; property owners never encounter the double-booking problem.
5. Adding a property to Featured Property column brings me extra cash.
6. Most of the property owners like the possibility to pay their membership fee right at the site.
7. I am glad I am the only person who collects the payments.
8. Owners are free to set/edit prices in Rate Calendar anytime without contacting me.
9. My wife is glad that I work at home.
10. Finally I put my business to order! I wish I had done it earlier.


Got questions? Feel free to contact us

[bud]

1) Showcase
What helps online business reach its objectives and enjoy smooth cash flow? CompanyX asserts that it is a powerful software engine and professional support, like those CompanyX provides. Click on the above image to explore the functionality of the software developed by CompanyX team.
1) Showcase
What helps an online business reach its objectives and enjoy a smooth cash flow? CompanyX asserts that it is a powerful software engine and professional support, like those CompanyX provides. Click on the above image to explore the functionality of the software developed by the CompanyX team. (Very natural-sounding!)


2) 10 reasons to use CompanyX product


We are sure that you will discover much more advantages when you use CompanyX product in your business.
We would like to quote top 10 reasons to use CompanyX. They are most often mentioned by our customers.

2) 10 reasons to use CompanyX products

We are sure that you will discover many more advantages when you use CompanyX products in your business.
Here are the top 10 reasons for using CompanyX. They are the ones most often mentioned by our customers. (I suggested the change at the beginning to make it more assertive... "To use" is correct, but I thing "for using" is more natural.)


1. My property owners find it very easy to publish/edit their property listings.
Good!


2. The most viewable pages of my site are house pictures and movies.
2. The most xxxxx pages of my site are the house pictures and movies. (I don't think "viewable" is your best choice because it really means "able to be viewed." It makes it sound like other pages have problems. Consider an adjective such as "valuable," "exciting," "helpful" or "creative.")


3. I like that all my info is kept in one place and I have full control of inquiries.
Good!


4. Availability Calendar saves the time; property owners never encounter the double-booking problem.
The Availability Calendar saves time; property owners never encounter a double-booking problem. ("saves time" instead of "saves the time.")


5. Adding a property to Featured Property column brings me extra cash.
5. Adding a property to the Featured Property column brings me extra cash.


6. Most of the property owners like the possibility to pay their membership fee right at the site.
6. Most of the property owners like the ability to pay their membership fee right at the site. ("Possibilty" is fine, but i think you would have to change the grammar to "possibility of paying." I'm not absolutely sure that "possibility to pay" is incorrect, but it sounds awkward to me. "Ability" sounds fine with "to pay.")


7. I am glad I am the only person who collects the payments.
I'm not sure exactly what is meant here. Does it mean that he/she is glad that they do not have to hire anyone to help in collecting the payments? I'd suggest rewriting this one.


8. Owners are free to set/edit prices in Rate Calendar anytime without contacting me.
8. Owners are free to set/edit prices in the Rate Calendar anytime without contacting me.


9. My wife is glad that I work at home.
Good!


10. Finally I put my business to order! I wish I had done it earlier.

10. Finally I put my business in order! I wish I had done it earlier.


Got questions? Feel free to contact us
Have questions? Feel free to contact us (Using "got" here reeks of slang.)

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This is very well-written, Daya! It's very natural sounding, and appropriate language for a business website. Nice work!

[daya]

Hello Bud,

Thank you for the helpful corrections. I notice there are generalities of natural use to learn. Your are very kind to give your time for helping. I would like to ask a question. What does "reeks of slang" mean? In google it says "It reeks of slang, of the ordinary, of lazy parents."

Daya

[bud]

Yes, Daya, some things in English just take a lot of experience to learn. They are issues where studying hard does not help very much. The use of articles is one of those things, and by far, the majority of my edits dealt with them. The good thing is that rarely does that alter the meaning of what you are saying, so they are very minor mistakes. You communicate at a very high level of English.

"To reek" is normally used for something that smells really bad. It can also be used as a metaphor. By, "It reeks of slang," I meant that it had a strong sense of being slang: impossible to ignore, as in a bad odor.

Keep up the good work!

[daya]

Thank you Bud. You are very kind to give your time for helping. I will tell my coworkers your comment. We are a team of writers so we can put our heads together to make a better result! :D

Daya