sentences

[elodie]

Hello Teachers,
1. We are looking for an experienced Company Secretary and ambitious to join our Sales Department.

2. Before applying for a job, it needs to submit a cv and documents stating details of the applicants to the would-be employers.

3. Most applicants know that the recuritment for the youngs represent a major decision for the company.

4. The young lady didn't drive well, the Sales Manager must have been scared.

5. I think that it had better lay this young man off as he is not dynamic enough.

6. The boss will have to get rid of those staff who have been working for the company long since.

Are they correct?
Thank you for correcting them>

[oishii]

Hello Elodie,

Here are some corrections...

1. We are looking for an experienced and ambitious Company Secretary to join our Sales Department.

The adjectives would go together.

2. Before applying for a job, the applicant needs to submit a cv and documents stating his/her details to the would-be employers.

Singular neuter pronouns are converted to either masculine or feminine pronouns when referring to a person, so you wouldn't use 'it' to refer to the applicant. I think in this case, it may also be better to use a noun (applicant) to refer to the person first and then use a possessive adjective to refer to the 'details'

3. Most applicants know that the recruitment of young people represent a major decision for the company.

The expression is 'recruitment of'. Also, instead of using 'youngs' (which is not a form used in English), you might consider using 'the youth' or 'young people' or 'the young'.

4. The young lady didn't drive well, * the Sales Manager must have been scared.

* You might add a linking word here such as 'so'.

5. I think that they had better lay** lay this young man off as he is not dynamic enough.

Again, as in #2 above, you would not use 'it' here to refer to the people at the company. ** You may also consider using the word 'should' here. ... I think they should lay this young man off as he is not dynamic enough.

6. The boss will have to get rid of those members of the staff who have been working for the company for a long time now.

---or---

The boss will have to get rid of staff that have been working for the company for a long time now.

Because 'staff' is a collective noun, you would have to make a change in the structure of the sentence. 'Long time since' is not idiomatically correct, so you will have to state the length of time in a different way.

Hope this was of help.

Byeee!