Who can correct my passage?

[jiunshan]

I had wrote some entries for my blog, but I need your guys help me to correct my grammar language usage. Thanks!

"23/4/2007 is a memorable day for me. The very first day in my life, I went for backpacking alone, yes, a girl travels alone. Yeah, i know, somebody will telling me this is too dangerous..blah..blah...but listen to me! If something bad will happens, nor matter what you're doing, where you're, it's be destined, it will happens! This is your destiny! Alright, let's get back to our topic...23/4 a memorable day! The day I keep on counting and waiting was coming..I was so excited!

I get myself a 845pm train ticket to Padang Besar, Perlis. I departed from house around 645pm, and I though I would able to catch a bus to LRT station, but life is not easy...I had been waiting for 45mins but there was no trace of buses, terrible traffic jam on the road, what should I do? I was so afraid I couldn't make it in time! So, I decided to take a cab with 2 others Malays to LRT station. KTM (Keretapi Tanah Melayu) was also arrived late, just like its name, KTM=Keretapi Taktentu Masa (Train not on time). It's 830pm when i arrived in KL Central.

I never take train on travel before. This is a very new and fresh experience for me! You should try it if you never take a train before. My emotion/feeling was keep hanging in high peak on that day (too excited), so I felt tired when I lied down on my berth. The berth's comfortable, and the train keep on swinging along the journey, just like a baby swinging bed. This is too comfortable! I had a sweet dream along the journey."

[Rusty]

I had wrote some entries for my blog, but I need your guys help me to correct my grammar language usage. Thanks!

"23/4/2007 is a memorable day for me. The very first day in my life, I went for backpacking alone, yes, a girl travels alone. Yeah, i know, somebody will telling me this is too dangerous..blah..blah...but listen to me! If something bad will happens, nor matter what you're doing, where you're, it's be destined, it will happens! This is your destiny! Alright, let's get back to our topic...23/4 a memorable day! The day I keep on counting and waiting was coming..I was so excited!

I get myself a 845pm train ticket to Padang Besar, Perlis. I departed from house around 645pm, and I though I would able to catch a bus to LRT station, but life is not easy...I had been waiting for 45mins but there was no trace of buses, terrible traffic jam on the road, what should I do? I was so afraid I couldn't make it in time! So, I decided to take a cab with 2 others Malays to LRT station. KTM (Keretapi Tanah Melayu) was also arrived late, just like its name, KTM=Keretapi Taktentu Masa (Train not on time). It's 830pm when i arrived in KL Central.

I never take train on travel before. This is a very new and fresh experience for me! You should try it if you never take a train before. My emotion/feeling was keep hanging in high peak on that day (too excited), so I felt tired when I lied down on my berth. The berth's comfortable, and the train keep on swinging along the journey, just like a baby swinging bed. This is too comfortable! I had a sweet dream along the journey."

I have written some entries for my blog, but I need you r guys to help me to correct my grammar and language usage. Thanks!

"23/4/2007 is a memorable day for me. The very first day in my life, I went for backpacking alone; yes, a girl travels alone. Yeah, I know, somebody will be telling me this is too dangerous..blah..blah...but listen to me! If something bad will happen s, no r matter what you're doing, where you are, it's be destined to be, it will happens! This is your destiny! Alright, let's get back to our topic...23/4 a memorable day! The day I kept on counting and waiting for was coming..I was so excited!

I got myself a 8:45pm train ticket to Padang Besar, Perlis. I departed from my house around 6:45pm, and I thought I would be able to catch a bus to LRT station, but life is not easy...I had been waiting for 45mins but there was no trace of buses, terrible traffic jam on the road, what should I do? I was so afraid I couldn't make it in time! So, I decided to take a cab with 2 other s Malays to LRT station. KTM (Keretapi Tanah Melayu) was also arrived late, just like its name, KTM=Keretapi Taktentu Masa (Train not on time). It was 8:30pm when I arrived in KL Central.

I have never taken a train on travel before. This is a very new and fresh experience for me! You should try it if you have never taken a train before. My emotions/feelings were kept hanging at a high peak on that day (too excited), so I felt tired when I lay down on my berth. The berth was comfortable, and the train kept on swinging along the journey, just like a baby's swinging bed. This was too comfortable! I had a sweet dream along the journey."

[jiunshan]

Thank You, Rusty!

Feel free to visit me at: http://jiunshan.blogspot.com
(http://jiunshan.blogspot.com)
These are another two passages of mine, hope you may advise! Thank You!


Passage 1:
"I've planned for this journey since January, 2007 after reading other's travels. Their travels, their enthusiasm towards backpacking, have aroused my desire. I had a dream...I wish to travel around the world in future! Future?! but exactly when my dream will comes true? I've no idea at all, frankly speaking, I'm afraid, I'm worry, worry about my safety, worry about where to get $$$ for travel, worry about what will happened...so this is just a 'DREAM' for me that I 'WISH' I can make it in one day!! Eventually, I had made my dream comes true, I had stepped out my very 1st step,
yeah~Finally, I made it! I would like to share my happiness with all of you!

At this very beginning, I will backpacking in Malaysia, my own country. After that, I might travel to Asia Countries, then Australia, Europe, Middle-East Countries, and US and Canada. Africa, maybe! South and North Pole? I will think about this~

For those who love to travel but feel worry or afraid, Don't worry and nothing be afraid~GO AHEAD~not to worry much~you can made it just like me and the others!

Here, my journey begins~"


Passage 2:
"This is the 2nd blog I ever own beside Windows Live Spaces. This blog's mainly about my backpacking life and all the entries will be perform in English! I never write my blog in English before and this becoming a difficulty for me, as you know, as you read, my English standard isn't that good...but I will try my best and do my best! Do drop by often and give me some advices, encourages...anything, I appreciate it!

So, as you're already here, I hope you will enjoy while reading this blog and REMEMBER, post some comments for me, your encourages drive me forward! Thank You! Wish you 'Have a Nice Day!'

P/S:
Another blog of mine which is more about my daily life and it's being written in Chinese. If you can read Chinese, do visit me there! Thanks!
URL: http://jiunshan.spaces.live.com/"

[Hiba]

"23/4/2007 is a memorable day for me. The very first day in my life, I went for backpacking alone, yes, a girl travels alone. Yeah, i know, somebody will tell me this is too dangerous..blah..blah...but listen to me! If something bad will happen, no matter what you're doing, where you're, it's be destined, it will happen! This is your destiny! Alright, let's get back to our topic...23/4 a memorable day! The day I keep on counting and waiting was coming..I was so excited!

I've got myself a 845pm train ticket to Padang Besar, Perlis. I departed from house around 645pm, and I though I would be able to catch a bus to LRT station, but life is not easy...I had been waiting for 45mins but there was no trace of buses, terrible traffic jam on the road, what should I do? I was so afraid I couldn't make it in time! So, I decided to take a cab with 2 others Malays to LRT station. KTM (Keretapi Tanah Melayu) arrived late also, just like his name, KTM=Keretapi Taktentu Masa (Train not on time). It's 830pm when i arrived in KL Central.

I've never taken a train on travel before. This is a very new and fresh experience for me! You should try it if you never take a train before. My emotion/feeling kept hanging in high peak on that day (too excited), so I felt tired when I lied down on my berth. The berth's comfortable, and the train kept on swinging along the journey, just like a baby swinging bed. This was too comfortable! I had a sweet dream along the journey."[/quote]

[Rusty]

Thank You, Rusty!

Feel free to visit me at: http://jiunshan.blogspot.com
(http://jiunshan.blogspot.com)
These are another two passages of mine, hope you may advise! Thank You!


Passage 1:
"I've planned for this journey since January, 2007 after reading other's travels. Their travels, their enthusiasm towards backpacking, have aroused my desire. I had a dream...I wish to travel around the world in future! Future?! but exactly when my dream will comes true? I've no idea at all, frankly speaking, I'm afraid, I'm worry, worry about my safety, worry about where to get $$$ for travel, worry about what will happened...so this is just a 'DREAM' for me that I 'WISH' I can make it in one day!! Eventually, I had made my dream comes true, I had stepped out my very 1st step,
yeah~Finally, I made it! I would like to share my happiness with all of you!

At this very beginning, I will backpacking in Malaysia, my own country. After that, I might travel to Asia Countries, then Australia, Europe, Middle-East Countries, and US and Canada. Africa, maybe! South and North Pole? I will think about this~

For those who love to travel but feel worry or afraid, Don't worry and nothing be afraid~GO AHEAD~not to worry much~you can made it just like me and the others!

Here, my journey begins~"


Passage 2:
"This is the 2nd blog I ever own beside Windows Live Spaces. This blog's mainly about my backpacking life and all the entries will be perform in English! I never write my blog in English before and this becoming a difficulty for me, as you know, as you read, my English standard isn't that good...but I will try my best and do my best! Do drop by often and give me some advices, encourages...anything, I appreciate it!

So, as you're already here, I hope you will enjoy while reading this blog and REMEMBER, post some comments for me, your encourages drive me forward! Thank You! Wish you 'Have a Nice Day!'

P/S:
Another blog of mine which is more about my daily life and it's being written in Chinese. If you can read Chinese, do visit me there! Thanks!
URL: http://jiunshan.spaces.live.com/"

Passage 1:
"I've planned for this journey since January, 2007 after reading others' travels. Their travels, their enthusiasm towards for backpacking, have aroused my desire. I have a dream...I wish to travel around the world in the future! Future?! but exactly when will my dream will come s true? I've no idea at all, frankly speaking, I'm afraid, I'm worried, worried about my safety, worried about where to get $$$ for travel, worried about what will happen ed...so this is just a 'DREAM' for me that I 'WISH' I can make it in one day!! Eventually, I have made my dream come s true, I have stepped out on my very 1st step,
yeah~Finally, I've made it! I would like to share my happiness with all of you!

At this very beginning, I will be backpacking in Malaysia, my own country. After that, I might travel to Asian countries, then Australia, Europe, Middle-East countries, and US and Canada. Africa, maybe! South and North Pole? I will think about this~

For those who love to travel but feel worried or afraid, don't worry and nothing don't be afraid of anything~GO AHEAD~not to worry much a lot~you can make it just like me and the others!

Here, my journey begins~"


Passage 2:
"This is the 2nd blog I've ever owned besides Windows Live Spaces. This blog's mainly about my backpacking life and all the entries will be perform written in English! I've never written my blog in English before and this is becoming a difficulty for me, as you know, as you read, my English standard isn't that good...but I will try my best and do my best! Do drop by often and give me some advice s, encouragement...anything, I appreciate it!

So, as you're already here, I hope you will enjoy while reading this blog and REMEMBER, post some comments for me, your encouragement will drive me forward! Thank You! Wish Hope you 'Have a Nice Day!'

[jiunshan]

Again Rusty, you have helped me a lot! Thank You very much!!

But I have a question.

Singular + verb(s)
Plural + verb

Am I right?

So, as an example:

ME: when will my dream comes true?
RUSTY: when will my dream come true? (You had corrected my grammar mistake)

Dream is singular, why "dream come true", the "come" not + s??

Hope you understand what I'm talking.

Thank You again

[Rusty]

Again Rusty, you have helped me a lot! Thank You very much!!

But I have a question.

Singular + verb(s)
Plural + verb

Am I right?

So, as an example:

ME: when will my dream comes true?
RUSTY: when will my dream come true? (You had corrected my grammar mistake)

Dream is singular, why "dream come true", the "come" not + s??

Hope you understand what I'm talking.

Thank You again
The singular, 3rd person takes "s." He comes late. She comes early. It never comes. The future tense with "will" does not have "s." I will come, you will come, he/she/it will come, they will come. My dream will come.