corret me plz

[shimaa]

hi

i wrote some stories( in fact, i translated them to english)
plz correct them for me if they have mistakes.
thanks

1.little fish
There was a little fish in the sea.
An old fish said about sea for other fishes.
About it width, it color, it surges, …
The little fish wanted to see sea!
All of the fishes say him: you are in sea.
But he doesn't believe.
So the old fish says him: if you like to see sea, you will die!
Because you should jump toward seaside & then you should look at your back. Therefore you will see sea!
Little fish accept& he jumped toward seaside……
He saw sea & he knew that he was always with sea…
Then he falls on the ground & dies.
.
We are like that little fish & God is like the sea.
We will find out God when we die.
We will feel him after die & we'll know that he was always with us.
But we should feel him now, in this world.
.. The end ..

2.crow

There was someone, there wasn’t someone…
There was no one but kind God…
A crow was living on top of a tall pine with her chicks.
Once a fox came there and heard chicks voices. He was very hungry.
He puts on gardener clothes & comes again. He start to ax(e) the tree.
The crow says: what are you doing???
Fox says: “I’m a gardener and I want to use the wood of this tree.”
Crow shouts: “Oh! No! don’t ax(e) it; my chicks are very little, they can’t fly. Please wait till my chicks become older.”
The fox said: “if you want I don’t ax(e) this tree, you should give me one of your chicks everyday.
The crow became very sad but she accepted; she told fox: “please come tomorrow and don’t eat my chicks today… I want to prepare them!”
“ok”, the fox said!
& left.
Then the crow traveled to her hometown & said these happens to her families.
An old crow says: you should go to the riverside and take some stone to your home… & when the fox comes & wants your chick, tell him that he has to close his eyes; because your chick fears his eyes…
She said ok and goodbye & returned to home with a stone…
When the fox came. She did what the old crow had said… & fox’s mouth became full of blood & the stone broke his teeth. The fox left there & after it he always eats plant and vegetables!
Thus the crow lived with her chicks well.
.. The end ..


3.shangool o mangool
There’s someone, there wasn’t someone…
There’s no one, but kind God…
There was a goat who lived with her children.
Their names were Shangool, Mangool & Habbeye angoor.
Once their mother wanted to go to bring grass for them… she advised them so much & she told them not to open the door for wolf.
She went and the children started playing.
The wolf was near their house, he saw that the mother went go out;
So he came behind the door and knocked…
The children said, “who is knocking?”
He said, “I am your mother!”
They answer, “no no, you’re not our mom. Her voice is soft”
The wolf left and went to confectionery.
He scared the confectioner and got a lot of confections and ate them.
Thus his voice became soft !
He came back and knocked…
- “who is knocking?”
Soft voice said: I am your mother!
Habbe said, ‘if you are our mother, show your hands beneath the door”
When the wolf did this, they said, “no no, you are not our mother. Her hands are white.”
The wolf became angry and went to the bakery.
He scared the baker and make white his hands with flour, came back and knocked…
- “who is knocking?”
The wolf told them he is their mother…
His voice was soft
They saw his hands; they were white….
Oohhh
They thought he is their mother and opened the door.
The wolf jumped in and ate the children. He was very hungry and didn’t nibble them!
Gulp!
He went out and slept near a tree.
Then mommy goat came… the house was untidy, she called her children… they weren’t there.
She start to cry… habbe angoor had not been eaten … he had went behind the big clock that was in their house…
He came out and described all happening for his mother…
Mother knew what to do… she pick up a needle and a thread and a knife.
She went out and saw the wolf that is sleeping near a tree.
She asked habbe angoor to bring some stones.
She ripped the wolf’s belly. The children were healthy. She became very happy.
After it the mother loaded his belly by stones!
She sewed his belly.
They went away.
When the wolf woke up, he was very thirsty.
He went top of the well and wanted to drink some water… but the stones in his belly made him fall into well… and he died.
.
.
Some years later mommy goat told their children that they should build 3 houses for themselves.
They accepted and went to do it.
Shangool build a house of chaff.
Mangool build a house of wood.
And Habbe angoor build a stone house.
They were living there and usually visited their mother at weekend.

Once day the first wolf’s brother came there!
He wanted to revenge…
With a blow shangool’s house became destroyed.
Shangool went to mangool’s house.
The wolf’s brother fired that house with a match.
Shangool and mangool went to Habbe angoor’s house.
But this time the wolf could not destroy the house at all… blow, fire, dynamite,… were not useful.
Finally he decided to come in chimney!
He went into it, but the chimney was tiny and wolf was big !!
He couldn’t move …
At the house the children started to cook a food and the heat of fireplace cauterized the wolf and flung him far from there…
After it the mommy goat and her children lived well…
….:: The End ::…

[shimaa]

hi
there is nobody here to help me?!(to correct my mistakes in those stories traslation)

[rogual]

I'll do one for you.

There was a little fish in the sea.
An old fish told tales of the sea for other fishes.
About its width, its color, its surges, …
The little fish wanted to see the sea!
All of the fishes said to him: you are in the sea.
But he didn't believe.
So the old fish said to him: if you see the sea, you will die!
Because you should jump toward the seaside & then you should look behind you. Then you will see the sea!
The little fish accepted & he jumped toward the seaside……
He saw the sea & he knew that he had always been in the sea…
Then he fell on the ground & died.
.
We are like that little fish & God is like the sea.
We will find out God when we die.
We will feel him after we die & we'll know that he was always with us.
But we should feel him now, in this world.
.. The end ..

Just watch your articles (a, the) and stick to one tense, past or present. Don't keep switching between them. (This is okay in speech, but not in writing. Switching within one sentence is always wrong.)

Also, "Jumped toward the seaside" isn't wrong, but it sounds a bit odd. You might want to rephrase it.

[shimaa]

thank you so much rogual .

[shimaa]

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